I. Introductory Paragraph:
Role: To be an inspiration
Name of Teacher # 1: Mrs. Partington
Name of Teacher # 2: Ms. LouAnne Johnson
They are both POSITIVE examples of the role
II. Body Paragraphs:
A. One characteristic of Teacher # 1 that makes her a good example of the role: Her determination
Examples of this characteristic:
1. When kids got out rowdy and she didn't put up with their games. She got them under control.
2. When all of the assigned reading books were stolen from the classroom as a prank, she had the librarian bring her a copy of each book and read them aloud instead.
3. If any students were caught cutting class, she had their parents come in and surprise the kid in the next class period. They would sit through the entire class for that day.
B. Another characteristic for Teacher # 1: Her encouragement
Examples of this characteristic:
1. One student, Andrew, was dyslexic. He used that as an excuse to not do any of the readings or the homework. She gave him a lot of attention, when he was used to being ignored and written off. She tutored him in class and after school, and after a while he was one of the fastest readers in the class.
2. Mrs. Partington was big on positive reinforcement. If you did a great job on a paper or assignment, she let the whole world know. But she never criticized students in front of other students.
3. She pushed all of her students to take the SATs and other pre-college tests, even if the kids said they weren't going to college. She informed us about financial aid, scholarships, etc. She even had a "College/Career Day" held in our classroom where she brought in counselors, administrators and athletic coaches from nearby college campuses to talk to us.
C. Third characteristic for Teacher # 1: She was our advocate
Examples of this characteristic:
1. She defended her classes. It was a lot like Mr. Escalante, where the Principal said that our test scores had jumped up so dramatically that we HAD to have been cheating. She knew it wasn't the case, and she fought for us. In the end, they realized we had done it on our own.
2. Christian was a guy on the football team who was getting a lot of trouble from his teammates when they found a book of poetry in his locker. They started making his life hell, saying that he was gay. Mrs. Partington took control and spoke to their coach, letting him know what was going on. Not only did the guys get punished with extra time in practice, but they all had to read the entire poetry book and give Christian a report on it.
3. My friend Emma had a very strict family. She came from a low-income family, and they honestly only sent her to school because they had to by law. She was extremely bright, showed a lot of promise, and was determined to be the first in her family to go to college. But her parents went to the principal when they found out that Mrs. Partington was encouraging Emma to take the SATs and was preparing her for college. Mrs. Partington fought right back, stating that it was her job to educate Emma and make her aware of every possibility available to her. It took a while, but finally Emma's parents conceded. She graduated from Harvard Medical School in 2011. :)
D. Characteristics for Teacher # 2:
Characteristic # 1: Her tenacity
1. On the first day of teaching her new class, Ms. Johnson did not do well at all. When Emilio got in her face, she wrote his name on the board. But even after being laughed out of the classroom, she still came back.
2. She realized that she needed a way to connect to her students, and decided to use karate as a means to accomplish it. By having Raul and Durrell do a demonstration, she got her students' attention.
3. She endured the discouragement from her other colleagues, like when the principal told her that she had to stick to the curriculum and the required reading for her class. And again when the assistant principal tried to kick Callie out of school for being pregnant.
Characteristic # 2: She went beyond normal means to help her students
1. When Durrell stopped showing up for school, Ms. Johnson went to his house to speak with his grandmother. His grandmother told her that he had more important things to do than go to school, and Ms. Johnson tried to convince her that he had a better future ahead of him. While it did not work, most teachers would not have even gone to the trouble.
2. When Ms. Johnson and Raul went out to dinner, he told her that he'd need to miss a few days of class in order to work to pay off a debt. Instead of allowing him to miss school, Ms. Johnson lent him the $200 he needed and told him he had to pay her back on the day that he graduates. Not only did she keep him in class, she also motivated him to graduate, knowing that he couldn't stand to have a debt left unpaid.
3. Emilio was threatened by his girlfriend's ex who said that he had stolen his girl and was going to kill him. Emilio believed that the only way to save himself was to kill the guy before he could kill Emilio. Ms. Johnson promised to keep him safe and took Emilio to her home and let him spend the night.
Characteristic # 3: Her connection to the students' lives
1. When she had the students read the lyrics to the song "Hey Mr. Tambourine Man", they didn't understand the meaning. But once she connected it to something they were familiar with, saying that Mr. Tambourine Man is a drug dealer, it made them understand it perfectly. It seems dark or wrong to do so, but it was effective.
2. When she had the students do the Dillon VS. Dylan competition, it not only taught them how to interpret poetry, but how to embrace the darkness in it, as well as to understand the meaning it had in their own lives. To the students, "Do not go gentle into that good night" was about choices and pride. It taught them to hold their heads high, to fight for what they believe in, and to go down swinging.
3. When Callie said she was going to drop out of school because she was pregnant, Ms. Johnson went to her house and talked to her about it. Not only did she let Callie know that she had other options, she told Callie something very personal. She told her how her ex-husband had beaten her, which is what caused the divorce and also caused Ms. Johnson to get an abortion. While she was in no way trying to encourage Callie to do the same, she did make her reqalize that she can still have a future, and that reality is much different than her fairytale.
III. Conclusion:
First sentence: While Mrs. Partington and Ms. Johnson are very similar in terms of inspiration, endurance and level of experience, they differ in disciplinary style, background, and the strategies they use in trying to reach their students.
Rest of conclusion: They are both perfect examples of what I believe to be a great teacher. They each played the most important role, by not only being an inspiration to their students, but also knowing when to fight for them, when and how to discipline them, and when to just be there for them, no matter what they needed. They both encountered very difficult situations with their students, and while Ms. Johnson's was a lot more extreme than Mrs. Partington's was, they both learned to deal with them, as well as prepared their students to deal with similar situations.